tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1806956754310364893.post1154690348327380029..comments2023-08-21T22:33:34.286-07:00Comments on She Dreams: Brief Glimpse of Sweet Spotthewyndhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09476656359810192923noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1806956754310364893.post-25040260304780067592011-10-12T11:33:29.403-07:002011-10-12T11:33:29.403-07:00Renee, that makes me feel great knowing that they ...Renee, that makes me feel great knowing that they are well developed. This scene is early in their relationship. Since I haven't revealed much about them, knowing that their connection comes through like that is awesome!<br /><br />Good point on the dash. It does emphasize the line. I never know when a dash works, a comma works, or an ellipsis.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09748063494119693376noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1806956754310364893.post-78264127671491868902011-10-12T11:28:19.945-07:002011-10-12T11:28:19.945-07:00Beth, thank you! These two are great characters an...Beth, thank you! These two are great characters and they are growing daily. I love them as well.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09748063494119693376noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1806956754310364893.post-75763048228227617222011-10-12T08:16:20.759-07:002011-10-12T08:16:20.759-07:00Gorgeous. Even from such a brief snippet it's ...Gorgeous. Even from such a brief snippet it's obvious that the characters and the relationship between them are very well-developed. I'm intrigued :)<br /><br />The one thing I might suggest is a dash instead of a comma in the last sentence of Willa's first line of dialogue. Not that the comma is wrong, but the dash might give the line a little more oomph. "Let me give you the grand tour--not that you can get lost or anything."<br /><br />(Of course, I abuse dashes like nothing else, so maybe don't listen to me XD)Reneehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00041942241646557197noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1806956754310364893.post-87668476051287439832011-10-11T17:58:12.859-07:002011-10-11T17:58:12.859-07:00Please don't stop. I love this. I would pay m...Please don't stop. I love this. I would pay money to read this. I love Tate and Willa. And I love the white walls. Not that it means anything coming from someone who isn't a writer but I am a consumer.S.B.https://www.blogger.com/profile/15236399168777815648noreply@blogger.com